Plate 4 ("Chap: 1")
. . . .
Beaming forth with her daughters into the Divine bosom.
<Where ! !> [15]
Where hast thou hidden thy Emanation lovely Jerusalem
. . . .
But the perturbed Man away turns down the valleys dark;
<Saying, We are not One: we are Many, thou most simulative>
[23]
Phantom of the over heated brain! shadow of immortality!
. . . .
Editors have observed the deleted "Where" in line 15 but have failed
to note the exclamation marks: these are deleted not by scratching but by
treatment as part of the marginal network (and by blue wash in the Mellon
copy). Line 23, read from enlargements of the Morgan and Rosenbloom
copies, is almost invisible beneath vines or washes in the others.
With removal from line 15 of the redundant and exclamatory "Where
! !" the text is considerably reduced in histrionics (there are still seven
exclamation marks in the first ten lines of the page). But the deletion also
removes, perhaps inadvertently, the required seventh foot of the line.
The deletion of line 23 is more seriously disruptive, since it removes
an indicator of the dialogue ("Saying") and half the epithet meant for the
one addressed ("simulative Phantom"), and because it obscures an important
element in the poem's definition. This plate opens Chapter 1, and readers
would have been helped by so explicit a definition of perturbed Man's error
as the now hidden assertion, "We are not One: we are Many."
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