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3.1 the shore ] the pleasant shore
3.2 stood ] stands
3.4 cooled ] cool
3.4 stretched ] stretches
3.5 Now ] Lately
3.6 in 1925 ] a decade ago
3.7-8 April; in those days only ] April. Now many bungalows cluster near it, but when this story begins only
3.17 had come ] came
4.8 this ] one
24.19 Dick's ] His
24.19-23 Shift this forward. ] His eyes . . . more.
75 At the top of this page Fitzgerald drew a Greek key design.
120.1-122.6 hour it had become ] hour of standing. . . . It had become
153.18 at (L.) ] in
154.17 yourself. Once ] yourself—once
154.24 subject. No good sense." ] subject."
154.28 people—they were the illusions ] people; illusions
155.7-9 deleted ] Moreover . . . stranger.
157.7 Kraepelin ] Krapaelin
157.13-15 You are still a carrot-top" Here insert description from page 24 old numbering ] You have the same stupid and unaging American face, except I know you're not stupid, Dick." It is impossible to be sure what Fitzgerald intended here because he seems to have revised this passage twice.
157.16 war" Dick said, "You ] war—you
158.5 privates ] private soldiers
158.10 "Toward ] "—toward
159.6 plateau ] eminence
159.12 Outside, some ] Some
159.13 one ] they
159.20 room. Pushing ] room; pushing
159.24 first ] first one
159.29 etc. etc. ] etc., etc.

192

160.1 about the ] about the time of the
160.16 [page] 2—Follow this form with the breaks here ] (2)
160.23 [page] 3—(ect) ] (3)
160 *This is my mark to say I have made final corrections up to this point.
178.19-20 path; where, in a moment, a shadow cut across it—she ] path —where in a moment a shadow cut across it. She
179.33 Bye-and-bye (?) ] By and by
180.22 shoulder—then apart. ] shoulder.
180.23 record,—Have ] record," she said. "—Have
181.4 table, male eyes ] table, eyes
193.15 Extra space after line 15.
193. Lester begin here & go to end of Chapter (2 pages)
212.9 Abe North ] Tommy
212.23-4 beach near my home above the Mediterranean with my husband and two children and our dear friends ] beach with my husband and two children.
362 This is DULL
362 You lay down the book & never pick it up—
369 Tiresome stuff! True but why?

The following entry from Fitzgerald's notebooks shows the revised structure of "The Author's Final Version" and indicates that he planned to omit two passages: Dick's encounter with the news-vendor in Paris (actually pp. 120-122), and the Divers' visit to Mary North Minghetti (pp. 322-341).[15] I have followed Cowley in deleting the first of these, which necessitated making two other deletions on page 399 (see Textual Notes). I have also followed Cowley in retaining the Minghetti material because cutting it would leave the reader ignorant of the reason for the bad feeling between Dick and Mary at the end of the novel. There is no moon on page 212.[16]

Analysis of Tender:

I	Case History	151-212	71 pps.	(change moon)	p. 212
II	Rosemary's Angle	3-104	101 pps.	P.3
III	Casualties	104-148,	213-224	55 pps. (-2)	(120 & 121)
IV	Escape	225-306	82 pps.
V	The Way Home	306-408	103 pps.	(-8) (332-341)