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F. Scott Fitzgerald liked to make lists, "hundreds of lists: of cavalry leaders and football players and cities, and popular tunes and pitchers, and happy times, and hobbies and houses lived in and how many suits since I left the army and how many pairs of shoes . . . ."[1] And there are the famous lists in his writings: the list of New England schools in This Side of Paradise, the list of homosexuals in a rejected manuscript fragment of Tender is the Night, the guest list in The Great Gatsby.[2] This article, however, will deal with a different kind of list, a list (or in this case several lists) of changes that Fitzgerald wanted made in the plates of his first novel, This Side of Paradise. These lists, which Fitzgerald sent to Scribners during the spring and summer months after the March 1920 publication of This Side of Paradise, were recently found in the Scribner Archive at Princeton University Library. They supply new bibliographical evidence about the printing history of This Side of Paradise and establish Fitzgerald's attitude toward the faulty text of that book. For the student of textual problems, they also demonstrate that once a flawed text is in print, it is difficult for an author or his publisher to repair it.
This Side of Paradise has a sloppy text. There are worse texts: prepublication cutting and tampering marred Look Homeward, Angel and Absalom, Absalom! and post-publication corruption damaged The Great Gatsby and The Wild Palms, but in the category of careless error This Side of Paradise is probably unequalled. Fitzgerald was a notoriously bad speller, and his grammar and punctuation were idiosyncratic to say the least. Examination of the manuscript of This Side of Paradise (among the Fitzgerald Papers at Princeton) reveals that many of the errors in the printed version of the novel were carried over intact from the manuscript. But a collation of this manuscript with the first printing of This Side of Paradise has also brought to light numerous additional mistakes that are almost surely attributable to typist and compositorial error or to careless copy-editing and proofing. Not all of the errors in the printed version, then, are Fitzgerald's.[3]
The mistake-riddled first printing of This Side of Paradise was published on 26 March 1920, and Fitzgerald was not long in hearing about the condition of his text. On 1 April 1920 Robert Bridges, editor of Scribner's Magazine, typed up the following office memo which listed eleven blunders:
THURSDAYm, APRIL 1st, 1920.
ERRORS IN:
"THIS SIDE OF PARADISE".
by
F. SCOTT FITZGERALD
- Page 28: Line 10: "Ex-Ambassador" should be "Ex-Minister."
- Page 80: Line 7 from bottom: "Cambell" Hall should be "Campbell" Hall
- Page 128: Line 13: "Dachari" should be "Daiquiri"
- Page 226: Line 2 from bottom: "Benêt" should be "Benét"
- Page 228: "I restless" should be "I am restless" (?)
- Page 229: "Kerenski" should be "Kerensky"
- Page 229: "Gunmeyer" should be "Guynemer"
- Page 232, "Gouveneer" should be Gouverneur".
- Page 294: "Mackeys" should be "Mackays".
- Page 304, Line 19: "God's" should be "Gods" (plural
Robert Bridges.[4]
Fitzgerald, in New York in early April to marry Zelda Sayre, followed Bridges' list with a list of his own. On the backs of sheets of stationery from the Biltmore Hotel — Fitzgerald and his bride were honeymooning there — he wrote down 29 changes that he wanted made in the plates. Of these alterations, 19 corrected errors in spelling, punctuation, and word usage, and the other ten were stylistic. This is not the conventional accidental-substantive distinction; there are mixtures of accidentals and substantives in both categories:
- On Dedication page Substitute Sigourney for Sigorney
- On page 6, line 7. change raconteur to the fem. gender
- On page 17 Should be two quotation marks in front of Casey Jones.
- On page 18, line 26. change Rhinehart to Rineheart
- On page 3, (1st sentence in the book), put a comma after trait and one after few.
- On page 51, line 9. Change Litt. to Lit.
- On page 51, line 29, Change Cumizza to Cunizza
- On page 56, line 2 Change Litt. to Lit.
- On page 80, line 29 Change Cambell to Campbell or whatever correct spelling is.
- Page 116, line 6. Substitute metier for flare
- Page 117, Line 30 Substitute Lit. for Litt.
- Page 119, line 4 One dot is outside the parenthesis
- Page 180, line 24 Substitute shimmee entheusiasticly. for tickle-toe on the soft carpet
- Page 182, line 27 Substitute the word utterly for the word just
- P. 184, line 1 Should be unimpeachable instead of impeachable
- P 199, 4th line from bottom Change juvenalia to juvenilia
- Page 224, line 24 Change Jenny to Jennie
- Page 224, line 25 Change Mckenzie to Mackenzie
- P. 228, line 23 Change I restless to I am restless
- P 229, line 17 Gunmeyer is not the correct Spelling of this name.
- Page 234, line 8 juvenilia instead of juvenalia
- Page 235, line 14 delete comma after sight
- P 235, line 23 should read was dead and sound not yet awoken—Life cracked like ice!—one brilliant ect (In other words, the word life should be capitalized but not the word one)
- P 240 Are the genders right in fifth line of poem?
- P 251, Line 9 Stretch! should be Scratch!
- P 296, line 27 deep should be much [5]
Corrections for This Side of Paradise
Scribners now had one list from Bridges and one from Fitzgerald. Maxwell Perkins, Fitzgerald's editor, apparently directed the printers at the Scribner Press to make the changes in these lists, for on 8 July 1920 he wrote to Fitzgerald that the corrections were made "in the earliest
So matters stood through May and June and two more printings of This Side of Paradise. By now the book was attracting notice and selling well. Word of its success spread to England, and W. Collins Sons & Co. Ltd. of London agreed to bring out an edition for the English market. News of the planned fresh typesetting reached Fitzgerald in Westport, Connecticut, where he and his wife were living for the summer, and caused him to write the following letter to Perkins:
Westport, Conn.
July 7th 1920
Dear Mr. Perkins:
In regard to this English edition of Paradise I want to ask you a favor. It seems to me that if the book appears there in a land of much more intense scholarship with approximately 100 mispellings and misprints it would hurt it.
You already have at least two lists of corrections Mr Bridges + mine + I am putting down herewith another list of additional ones some Harvard scholar sent me. I have gotten several letters recently which indicate that it is rather a mistake to let the book go thru edition after edition without corrections. Of course almost all the mistakes were mine but it was rather humiliating this morning to get a letter wondering whether "they left the mistakes in just as they did in the Young Visitors to keep the spirit of the original."[7]
At the end of this letter, Fitzgerald put down his second list of corrections, some of which had already been made in the plates and others of which were new:
- [page] 4 Change Margaritta to Margherita
- " 7 " Ashville to Asheville
- " 120 " Dachari to Daiquiori
- " 154 " Cecelia to Cecilia
- " 176 " Johnston to Johnson
- " 229 " Gunmyer to Guynemer
- " 232 " Gouveneer to Gouveneur
- " 233 " Bennet to Bennett
- " 240 " langeur to langueur
- " 242 " Celleni to Cellini
- " 252 " tens to teens
- " 300 " bon to borne
Corrections (3d list)[8]
If you can't find the other two lists I may be able to get another thorough list from some one.
F.S.F.[9]
All of the new errors mentioned in this second Fitzgerald list were changed in the Scribners plates. The new readings appeared in the seventh impression of August 1920. On 8 July 1920, Perkins wrote a letter to Fitzgerald telling him what was being done about the upcoming English edition:
28th July 1920.
Messrs Charles Scribner's Sons.,
Fifth Avenue at 48th Street,
NEW YORK.
Gentlemen,
We are very much obliged to you for the corrections that you have sent us for "THIS SIDE OF PARADISE". We will read the book very carefully for press in any case and will see that these are incorporated. We notice one mistake which you have not given in your list which is, that the author repeatedly uses the word juvenalia instead of juvenilia.[11]
On this side of the Atlantic, new criticism of the text of This Side of Paradise was appearing. Franklin P. Adams in his New York Tribune column "The Conning Tower" for 6 July 1920 attacked Fitzgerald for writing a book that was "sloppy and cocky; impudent instead of confident; and verbose. It is doubtful whether the Scribner proofreading is at fault for the numerous errors; and if they are the author's, they indicate a sloppy carelessness that it will pay Mr. Fitzgerald to overcome." Adams followed his remarks with a list of errors which he evidently got from a first, second, or third printing of This Side of Paradise, since some of them had by that time been changed in subsequent printings:
- Ashville [Compton] McKenzie
- Collar and Daniel's "First-Year Latin" Fanny Hurst
- Mary Roberts Rhinehart Lorelie
- cut a swathe "Ghunga Dhin"
- [Swinburne's] "Poems and Ballades" flambuoyant
- "Jenny Gerhardt" "Come Into the Garden, Maude"
- flare [for flair]
- [Arnold] Bennet
- Gouveneer Morris[12]
Fitzgerald was undoubtedly troubled by these fresh evidences of error in his book. His response was another letter to Perkins and another list of errors:
Westport, Conn.
July 16th, 1920
Dear Mr. Perkins:
Last week in the Tribune F. P. A. balled out my book and gave a long list of mispellings — I find by looking at the sixth edition that many of those first list of corrections havn't been made — for instance juvenalia (twice) in the section called "Tom the Censor" in "Experiments in Convalescense." I really think it has been a mistake to let it go so long.
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
Sincerely
F Scott Fitz
F.P.A. finds the following new misspellings
Frank on the Mississippi should be Frank on the
Lower Mississippi
Chap I
Collar + Daniel's First-Year Latin (mispelt)
Chap I
Cut a swathe (mispelt) Chap II
Poems + Ballades should be
Poems + Ballads
(Chap II)
- Fanny Hurst should be Fannie Hurst
- Lorelie (mispelt)
- Ghunga Dhin (mispelt)
- Flambuoyant (mispelt)
- Come Into the Garden, Maude. (mispelt?)[13]
But F.P.A. was not through with This Side of Paradise. In his 14 July 1920 column he published a second collection of errors from the book — this list supplied him by someone with the initials "C. W."
- inexplicably (for inextricably) Christie Mathewson
- Mont Martre confectionary
- tetotalling Lyoff Tolstoi
- Samuel Johnston Juvenalia
- Celleni forborne
- stimulous born (for borne)
Fitzgerald, still anxious to patch up his novel, sent a postcard to Perkins three days later giving his fourth and last list of errors:
Westport, Conn.
July 17th 1920
F.P.A. is at it again. Here is his latest list
- Old New Ones
- juvenalia Christie Mathewson
- born for borne confectionary
- Cellini Lyoff Tolstoi
- Samuel Johnston forborne
- inexplicably for inextricably
- Mont Martre
- tetotalling
- stimulous
Havn't my copy of the book so don't know where these occur
Sincerely
F Scott Fitzgerald[14]
Perkins, with Fitzgerald's third and fourth lists in hand, did some checking and wrote back to Fitzgerald on 30 July 1920. His letter indicates that he, too, wanted to mend the text of This Side of Paradise:
Here we might pause and count up the number of corrections lists that seem to have been made. They are: (1) Robert Bridges' list of 1 April 1920; (2) Fitzgerald's first list, probably compiled in early April 1920; (3) the list "some Harvard scholar" sent to Fitzgerald; (4) Fitzgerald's second list, made for the English edition and included in a 7 July 1920 letter to Perkins; (5) Perkins' conflated list which he sent to Collins in London probably in early July 1920; (6) F.P.A.'s first list in his column for 6 July 1920; (7) Fitzgerald's third list, occasioned by F.P.A.'s first list — this list was sent to Perkins on 16 July 1920; (8) the list put together by "C. W." and published in F.P.A.'s column for 14 July 1920; (9) Fitzgerald's fourth list, occasioned by "C.W.'s" list—this list was sent to Perkins on 17 July 1920; (10) Perkins' "list of the corrections that were made" which he told Fitzgerald he was going to send to him; (11) Perkins' "list of those that still should be made" which he told Fitzgerald that he would send "to our press for the next edition."
With so much effort going into the making of lists, one wonders what happened to the plates. The machine collation below tells the story. There are no unexplained changes; each plate variant is mentioned in at least one of the lists given above:[16]
Page | |||
& | First | Fourth | Seventh |
Line | Printing | Printing | Printing |
[v] | SIGORNEY | SIGOURNEY | |
3.1 | trait | trait, | |
3.2 | few | few, | |
4.1 | Margaritta | Margherita | |
6.7 | raconteur | raconteuse | |
7.33 | Ashville | Asheville | |
17.3 | 'Casey-Jones | "Casey-Jones | |
18.22 | "Ghunga Dhin," | "Gunga Dhin," | |
18.26 | Rhinehart | Rinehart | Rineheart |
28.10 | ex-ambassador | ex-minister | |
51.9 | Litt. | Lit. | |
51.29 | Cumizza | Cunizza | |
56.2 | Litt. | Lit. | |
80.29 | Cambell | Campbell | |
116.6 | flare | metier | |
117.30 | Litt. | Lit. | |
119.4 | Booth . . .). | Booth . . .) | |
120.13 | Dachari | Daiquiri | |
154.-- | Cecelia | Cecilia | |
176.36 | Johnston | Johnson | |
180.25 | tickle-toe | shimmy | |
on the soft carpet | enthusiastically | ||
182.27 | just | utterly | |
184.1 | impeachable | unimpeachable | |
224.24 | Jenny | Jennie | |
224.25 | McKenzie | Mackenzie | |
226.35 | Benêt | Benêt | |
228.23 | I restless | I am restless | |
229.13 | Kerenski | Kerensky | |
229.17 | Gunmeyer | Guynemer | |
232.21 | Gouveneer | Gouverneur | |
233.14 | Bennet | Bennett | |
235.14 | sight, | sight | |
235.23 | life | Life | |
235.24 | One | --one | |
240.28 | langeur | langueur | |
242.26 | Celleni | Cellini | |
251.9 | Stretch! | Scratch! | |
252.34 | tens | teens | |
294.23 | Mackeys | Mackays | |
296.27 | deep | much | |
300.27 | born | borne | |
304.19 | God's | Gods |
But this chart only shows changes. Some errors were corrected in one spot but left standing in another. For example, "Bennet" at 233.14 was
As late as 1922, at least one critic was still chiding Fitzgerald and Scribners about the errors in This Side of Paradise. In his first essay on Fitzgerald, Edmund Wilson wrote of the novel, "it is one of the most illiterate books of any merit ever published (a fault which the publisher's wretched proofreading apparently made no effort to correct). It is not only full of bogus ideas and faked literary references but it is full of English words misused with the most reckless abandon."[18] Fitzgerald was embarrassed by the text of This Side of Paradise. In the novel he had flaunted his familiarity with books, poems, critics, authors, and philosophers. He had attempted to balance his showiness with a good dose of irony, but the misspelled words, incorrect titles, and wrong names undercut his attitude more than he had intended. Indeed, these mistakes were the beginning of Fitzgerald's largely undeserved reputation for pseudo-intellectuality, a reputation that is still brought out and aired occasionally today.
Fitzgerald remained aware of the errors in This Side of Paradise for the rest of his life. He once inscribed a copy of the novel: "This book is a history of mistakes — something never retracted yet, in a way, to be ashamed of, by a conscientious worker . . . Scott Fitzgerald."[19] In 1938 he tried to persuade Scribners to bring out a new impression of the novel, and having given up hope of getting the errors expunged from the plates, was toying with the idea of writing a "glossary of absurdities and inaccuracies"[20] for the printing. No new impression was issued, however, and no
Today, there is still no reliable text of This Side of Paradise available. Scribners preserved most of the errors in the last printing of the first edition when they re-set the novel in 1960. In fact, the 1960 Scribners edition — distributed as a Scribner Library paperback and widely used by students, teachers, and even by publishing scholars — is worse than the 1920 text it is based on. A collation of the first printing of Scribners 1920 against the clothbound B-11.60[H] printing of Scribners 1960 reveals some 187 variants, a figure that does not include minor features of typography. Of the 187 changes, 40 enter the 1960 text legitimately from plate alterations in the first edition. Twenty-four of the remaining 147 variants are substantive, but only two of these substantive changes — at 127.26 and 270.22 of the 1960 text — can be classed as corrections. The other 22 changes are new corruptions. As might be expected, the 1960 text preserves "Juvenalia" at 218.25, "Juvenalia" at 219.17, and "juvenalia" at 186.20.
The errors in This Side of Paradise are significant. They figure in the initial reception of the book and in its subsequent critical reputation. One might even say that the mistakes have become a part of the history of the novel. But as has been noted, not all of the errors in the book are Fitzgerald's. Blame for the mistakes has to be distributed all along the line of textual transmission. Fitzgerald deserves some of the blame, but as he wrote years later of the errors in This Side of Paradise: — "My God — did they expect me to spell? If I was such a hot shot couldn't the proof-readers do the spelling?"[21]
The errors in This Side of Paradise should not be perpetuated. We are not getting the flavor of Fitzgerald's idiosyncratic spelling and word usage. We are instead getting a book marred by the careless error of most of the people — Fitzgerald included — who were involved in its original publication.
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