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This table lists a representative selection of those changes suggested by Haydn and accepted by Styron. The organization of the table is as follows: each entry begins with a page-line reference to the Bobbs-Merrill first edition of the novel. The page-line reference is followed by Haydn's emended reading from the "editorial" typescript. (This same reading appears at the given line in the Bobbs-Merrill text.) Next there appears a bracket which should be read as "emended from." Finally, Styron's original reading is given. For example:

18.9 whistle gave a loud blast] whistle made a shattering blast

Line 9 of page 18 of the first edition of Lie Down in Darkness reads "whistle gave a loud blast." This line is Haydn's emendation of Styron's original reading "made a shattering blast."

18.9 whistle gave a loud blast] whistle made a shattering blast
18.3 up this was no day—] this was no day to mess up
19.1 hair. As he bent over a] hair. Peering, bending over, a
30.21 that—How] that it was he she was yearning for. How
30.12 up Maudie sat alone, her braced leg outstretched on a stool. Helen crushed the child into her arms. ¶ "There] Maudie slept amid dolls and woolen dogs and familiar baby smelling bedclothes. The baby, waking from strange darkness into unfathomable light, began to cry but became quieter, after awhile, in her mother's arms. "There
30.3 up threatening rain] threatening death and rain
31.6 spreading wood?] spreading and trembling wood?
32.12-13 up window. Oh, take me now. She slept. ¶ A] window. And she slept, though uneasily. ¶ A
40.13 skirt. She heard the swollen notes of a mournful guitar; she] skirt. The notes of a mournful guitar, immensely magnified, fell on her ears; she
66.2 up because there was something wrong with her—but] because she was sick, because they both were sick—but
67.4 reading Winnie-the-Pooh. He] reading The House at Pooh Corner. He
73.14-15 up heart. His shirt unwashed. And] heart. October 21 come soon. And

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75.2 sweat: Forswear adultery and other such iniquities. It] sweat: Thou shall not forswear adultery and such iniquities. It
76.6 over October twenty-first. ¶ Sometimes] over (date). ¶ Sometimes
85.13-15 up her." She looked up at him, paused and shook her head. "Bunny," she said again, "I just don't think I love her." ¶ She] her." ¶ She
85.7 up home." ¶ "No] home." Her voice was sad and muffled, tickling his chest, and seemed to rise from great distances through his body. "No
87.20 made one over par] made two under par
98.20 room, and from his faltering, only half-willing hands. ¶ Charlie] room, and his soul, fainting with sudden despair, from all of the difficult, imponderable things which had gone before. ¶ Charlie
101.1 What had he done?] What have I done?
101.4 desolation. Then he knew. Standing at the door, he figured, she must have seen, or known, something frightening and terrible. ¶ Later, when] desolation. After that evening he saw Peyton only once or twice again for they both went off to school, but the particular tenderness of that evening lay for many years in his memory, sweet and disconcerting. He remembered how later, when
138.16-17 up that." She threw a dollar on the table. ¶ Then she wheeled] that." Dolly wheeled
143.19 up of psychology and] of Freud and
148.3-4 up sence dat weddin' you wouldn't have no truck wid him. Like] sence you come back from when po' little Maudie passed away you wouldn't have no truck with him. Like
151.15-16 up nobly. Mr. Casper thanked him kindly, gave Barclay a dirty look and hustled back to the limousine. ¶ Now] nobly. It was sheer expedience, but it worked, and Mr. Casper thanked him kindly, gave Barclay a dirty look and hustled back to the limousine, his heart aching at Ella Swan's soft high moan which still issued from within. ¶ Now
152.6 up by the dull unalleviated pain of guilt. Had] by vastly unsatisfying pain. Had
152.3 up not, he assured himself, alcoholic] not alcoholic
156.21 to Army Colonel] to Marine Colonel
156.20 up stationed at Camp Pickett. Loftis] stationed in Norfolk. Loftis
161.19-20 up I'll get my degree and then go into the Navy. I'm in the Reserve." They] I'll finish out this year at the university and go into the Navy." They
163.19 but it was Peyton who would suffer the most if there were a fight, and] but a fight would have bounced over more violently back upon Peyton, and
167.16 way down from Blackstone on] way over from Norfolk
168.10 up filled, in the careful fold] filled, the carefree fold
173.6-8 up her. From his law practice he received a marginal income, and the practice itself, involving as it did contracts and drafts and mortgages, was an increasing bore. Gradually] her. Gradually
207.9 up him! Or—do you? It depends." "Like] him!" "Like
207.6-7 up baby! Gimme a drink. Mmm. No, I don't really think you do." ¶ Loftis] baby!" ¶ Loftis
207.4-5 up Loftis took back his bottle from her, dipping the flagstaff, which he gripped in the other hand, in] Loftis held out his bottle to her, dipping the flagstaff, which he gripped in the same hand
208.1 smiled; there was a smear of lipstick on one of her large front teeth. ¶ They] smiled and shot out her fangs, smeared with lipstick. ¶ They

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210.17-18 as a long forward pass, which seemed to spin endlessly] as the football, spinning endlessly
210.16 up and he lost his] and someone had stolen his
210.15 up around someone else's neck. Loftis turned] around Hubert McPhail's neck. Loftis heard her call him "Admiral Sheridan." He turned
231.14-15 up clear some of the qualities about him that she loved. It was partially that] clear, that
241.10-11 up hats, they chatted for a moment, understanding each other. ¶ But] hats, a gentle, sure understanding sprang up between them, for although they had known each other professionally for many years, neither had, until this moment, suspected the other of such well-springs of compassion, of patience and humility in the face of God's most awful judgement. Their gentle hearts were, after a fashion, formed in the same mold, and each suddenly admired and respected in the other the wisdom which waits in reverent service upon those who suffer, only by accident of time, the same fate which would befall each of them, too, someday. But
260.18 up Warwick. All] Warwick; she had invited them by mail. All
262.6 up silly. After Maudie died I wanted—" ¶ He] silly. The thing I mean is that—well, when I quit school and went to New York I was all set to go wild, you know, after what happened in Charlottesville—" ¶ He
261.1 up eyes. There] eyes, with the faint breath of sorrow on her lips, and behind his own eyes. There
363.2 years; with] years; grave innocent promises made to a youngish father now grown older, a little wiser; with
269.7 necessity. ¶ "O.K., baby," he said. ¶ The] necessity, and he felt his heart scattering slowly away, like all the leaves of a book. ¶ The
269.15 it get] it—these people frequently become Unitarians or Christian Scientists—get
269.20 service. The] service. Whatever its shortcomings, if any, the
272.1-3 up mannerisms. Throughout the ceremony, she had forced herself to conceal her joy, revealing it, she knew, only in the light of triumph which flashed briefly across her eyes. It] mannerisms. The look Loftis had seen on her face had not been one of studiousness, but had reflected just an effort to conceal her joy. Only in the light of triumph which flashed briefly across her eyes had he made the right guess. It
273.1 triumph. Life] triumph. There are some people who can't stand joy unless it is a joy in which they themselves may participate, and Helen was participating to the hilt. Life
280.19 which (so Loftis' New York classmates told him) many] which many
291.18 little. ¶ Carey felt benevolent after three glasses of sherry, and] little ¶ Three drinks—straight bourbon—which, because he was a sherry man, he was unaccustomed to—had made Carey tighter than he would have wished, and
306.13 up for eight months he] for a year, nearly he
326.10 up monoliths; near] monoliths certainly something fantastic; nears
333.5 up said. "If I'd just known what was going on inside her. Why? Why?" "Sh-h-h] said. "If she just hadn't done it that way. The final sordid horror! The waste. Just a note! She could have told me!" "Sh-h-h
333.3 up easy." "I could have stopped her." "Cut] easy." "This was their fault, too. Perhaps mine. Yes, perhaps." "Cut
334.13 me." ¶ "I could have stopped her." ¶ There] me." ¶ "God." ¶ There
337.3 up too; he] too; I looked at it; it was limp and small now. He
339.13 down at me, his] down on my face like Pride or Doctor Faustus, his

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340.11 up with dead spirits." I] with the dead spirits of Suckling, Herrick and Donne." I
342.9 his shoulders there] his back there
342.10 and I] and I beat them until the blood came out: I
342.14 up big birds with] big animals with
345.1 up play someone said] play the muse said
348.13 hard. There] hard—and avoided the bowel movements everywhere along the curb, of dogs. There
358.19 up face. and] face like Magdalene's tears, and
363.15 up home. Albert] home. We moved off past the stop-light: nostalgia not longing was not like that, God the suffering: could he never know? How one part of me said, not he, but I, shall never come again, for he has had no guts at all. And Albert
363.7 up ethos—Call] ethos in the name of a funzoid, call
364.8 up gone? "Why] gone? And where had he gone, and will he never come again? I couldn't help thinking now: blessed Beatrice, and we lay down in the darkness—featherless, wingless, guiltless, so many years ago: blessed Beatrice, upon a day came sorrow into me, saying I have come to stay with thee awhile. "Why
365.19 up a metal bird. "Come] a pterodactyl. "Come
367.20 up a young man leaned] a colored fairy boy leaned
371.15 up down with] down in the darkness with
371.4 up address. "There] address. Soft and tender is my Harry, but will he never come again? "There
372.10 washing in] washing, her stink rank like scallions and hones in
372.19 down with] down in darkness with
378.15 time. Then I] time. It perished in my soul then, I knew he would never come again. Yet I
384.1 with pain: that] with a pain that passes all understanding: that